wjiang (wjiang)
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If I am choosing a place to live, I think location is THE most important among all the(NO THE) OTHER features.

Location connects with our life seamlessly -A WRONG SENTENCE . When a location is decided, many factors such as environment, safety, culture , are also decided consequently ( NO CONSEQUENTLY).

There is no doubt that location decide FORGOT 'S' environment. When I first came here, I found it was amazing that there are so many difference between different locationS. (STOP AT HERE) . even across only one block( CONFUSING) . While one district is full of prosperity, guilty and poor may BE in another district ( TOO SENSITIVE, CONFUSING SENTENCE).

Furthermore, I would like first consider location because it link LINKS with ( NO WITH) convenience (LINKS CONVENIENCE-- WRONG) . Every day people must work and at the weekend they may go to shopping center( PEOPLE MUST WORK EVERYDAY...). So a good place must be easy to go to(ACCESS IS BETTER THAN GO TO) the (NO THE) working place and the (NO THE)shopping center. This is why we can see in many rent advertisement there is so many `location sentence` such as `near subway, shopping center, walking distance to…..(LONG AND CONFUING SENTENCE)`.

At last, an excellent location can provide a fascinating scene(VIEW). YOU CAN Imagine how beautiful it will WOULD be when IF we live a house overlooking a park or a lake. That will be (IS) my dream( WILL BE? SO WHAT IS YOUR DREAM NOW?).

Besides(,) location also affect(S) education quality(NO QUALITY, EDUACTION IS ENOUGH) while (IF) a family have (HAS) a child.

Although there is many other reason (S) to (select other factors to) chose a house(, in my opion), (there is nothing more important than location in a determination. ) LOCATION IS THE MOST IMPORTANT
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